Friday, January 25, 2013

Ringing


Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week Lillie McFerrin will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in the five sentences, just use it for direction. Today's word is ringing.

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"Don't let go!" The child called. He ran toward me, my vision grew dim, his body became smaller and smaller. The ringing of my alarm clock bullied my head.

"I'm coming," I whispered and hit snooze.


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10 comments:

  1. To avoid disappointment she just told him what she wanted. So when she got it she felt satisfied, promised, even a little taken. She smiled the first of her forever smiles up at him. She looked the first of her forever looks down at it on her hand. The asking skipped over entirely, the being simply done, it shone back at her, a little dimmer than she’d expected.

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    1. This is great Kasie! Took me a while to count the five sentences, because you have so many commas in there, but it's legit five sentences. Great job!

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  2. Simple and to the point! Left me wanting to know more :)

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  3. Don't you just hate having a good (or interesting) dream interrupted? Nice story!

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  4. Nice story--I know the feeling in the morning

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  5. I too have had dreams that begged me not to leave, and I awoke feeling sad for the rest of the day. Good story!

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  6. Nicely done. So many can empathize.

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  7. Short, sweet and brilliant. I hate interrupted dreams and that alarm. The phrase 'bullied my head' is perfect.

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  8. I like this. It's vivid, surprising and tight, Sopphey.

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  9. Thank you all for the comments! My alarm clock always disturbs these kinds of dreams... that I had to write about it.

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